My Sisters Finger

This week for writing we have been learning how to use a hook to grab the reader's attention. I chose to make a story about my sisters finger. In the holidays my sister was outside my room and me and my brother were inside. The door was open and my brother closed it. It turned out my sisters finger was in the hinges and it cut her left pinky. If you like the hook of my story comment for a part 2. Here is my story.

Slam!
'AAAARRRRGGGGHHHH!!!'
My sisters finger was arched to the side like a bow. Her finger was a flopping bunny ear. One bloody bone poked out of her finger. Mum chucked her into the car.
VRRRM!
Off they went to the hospital.

Dancing Through the Evening

Today I was learning how to describe and use a hook. I had no idea how to spell Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious because it was not in a dictionary.
I enjoyed learning some of my speed.
I found it easy to write a hook.
I found it tricky to use similes.
Next time I would use more verbs.
My digital learning object shows that I can use a hook.

Here is my story
Dancing Through the Evening
Glowing lights blurred my view as the song Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious started playing. As quick as a jet Nikki ( my tap dance teacher ) gave me a what to do list for every single tiny week! Check the list to see it says new speed under week 3 which was next week! I was so excited that I screamed as loud as a screeching budgie. Group friends covered their ears. She finally got me to stop as we learnt the first move. I was sweating as much as a dog drools. Yelling over the music I yelled “WOW this is FAST!” Accidentally I left my tap shoes on a bench. While Nikki was trying to get me back I was already zooming through the rocks near the car. Mum started the car and we drove off to pick up my sister at Dancefit.

Beach On A Summer Afternoon

Today I was learning how to describe and hook our readers in.
I found it easy to make a new folder in my drive.
I found it tricky to make alliteration like the ones at the start starting with 'W'.
Next time I will change my hook to something even better.
My digital learning object shows that I can use google docs and ctrl c then ctrl v onto a google drawing.